the poor Albert
this story was when i was in age 10
I was born in a small town in southern India. And we had a hut in a bush. My dad's name is Gandhi and my mom's name is Hanna . And I just have one friend whose name is Hippopotamus. He his a true friend. My mom and dad did not have a job. Some days I went out to the street and sold some fruit. And after that day I came home with just 40 indian rupees. and that day I had eaten many fruits. That night when I was going to the bed i just felt something in my stomach and then I vomited. Me and my dad went to a big hospital in Southern India. They looked at my stomach and then they took some blood samples. And then the resultat came and they said that is just was the fruits that I had eaten during that day. And then I went to the reception and they said 40 rupees and I just earned 40 this day. So I gave them the money and went home. And then after a few days I went out to the street again because my family wanted some money to get some food from the market. And I went out to beg some money but nobody came up. So I decided to dance. And after a while a man came up with a big white car. It was so big and very beautiful. He came up to me and said that I danced well and then he asked me what my family was doing. And I said that my mom and dad did not have jobs. And then he said to jump in his big car because he wanted to ask my parents about a competition. And then we went home, my mom asked me who he was. Then I said a man who wanted me to dance at a competition. My mom asked if I knew this man, I said no then I asked mom if she would give me one chance to dance. Then my dad said we must think about this. After like a half and hour my dad and mom said yes. So the man said we are going to my studio first because we must practice with your son. And then we came to his big studio he had many tv s. And then we began to practice we practiced every single day.
Tournament day
The day had come I danced and it was very hard to get to the final but i came to the final. My opponent was a very good dancer and it was competition. After we danced the judges gave us points and they said that my opponent had 21 points. And now it was my turn to get points I was so sweaty. And then I got 25 points. My coach was so happy and I ran to my coach and said thank you for all this help that you gave me. Then the judges said to me to come up to the stage and then they said congratulation because I won the whole competition. And then they gave me 100.000 dollars because I won the whole competition.
Your text was god but don't forget to divide your text in paragraphs.
SvaraRadera